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This is me

I am a twelve-year-old girl .I am shot with a round face ,a small mouth and big black eyes. I am not too fat or too thin .I am in Class One Grade One in LongZhen Middle School.I am outgoing and like making friends with other girls,but they must be good ones in many ways , such as study, obeying school rules and so on . I like English very much.Now I can speak a little with my English teacher in class. I study very hard and do well in exams. I want to be a teacher when I grow up. In my free time, I often watch TV or listen to my favorite music and sometimes play games or chat with my friends on the line. I also help my parents with a little housework. My parents both say I am a good child. They like me very much .This is me.

本文语句连贯、句意完整、语法正确、内容充实、首尾呼应。句子结构富于变化，可以看出有较扎实的英语句法基础。能将所学过的基本知识融会贯通。例如“I am short with a round face ,a small mouth and big black eyes. ”就是教材中“I am short . ”和“I have a round face ,a small mouth and big black eyes. ”的重组，但效果上简捷。又如“I often watch TV or listen to my favorite music and sometimes play games or chat with my friends on the line. ”I在此句中能够恰当的使用并列结构作谓语，语句简洁流畅。

不足之处可能由于大意“short”误写作“shot”。总体上看是一篇优秀的文章。