初中英语作文MyFather.评析

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My Father

My father is a little short, but he is very strong. He has short and black hair. His face is a little black, because he always does farm work under the sun. He always wears disreputable cloths. I haven’t seen him wear good cloths. My father is very laborious. Every morning, when I got up, he has already done farm work for a long time. When I went to bed. He still does farm work. He never said he is back-busting. My father is strict with my study. He always told me that I had to study well, if I study well, I would live better. So I study hard. I don’t want to make him disappointed. This is my father. I think he is a good man! I am proud to have a father like him.

1. I haven’t seen him wear good cloths. 改为 wearing

2. He never said he is back-busting. 改为 it 在这表达劳动是辛苦的

3. I don’t want to make him disappointed. 改为disappoint

4. I am proud to have a father like him . 改为 I am proud of having a father like him.

章感情真挚，语句表达流利，有个别语法上的错误需要注意短语使用的语法规则。