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标题: 初中英语作文IlovemyHometown评析 [打印本页]

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标题: 初中英语作文I love my Hometown评析
I love my Hometown

My hometown is surrounded by blue moutains and green waters. There are many beautiful flowers and trees among the terraced fields.Seen from the hill, it looks like some natural works of art. The weather here is mild. It is good to our health. People here are evey friendly. If you have a chance to visit my hometown, all of us will treat you as our family members. I am sure that you will love it.


评析:My hometown is surrounded by blue moutains and green waters. There are many beautiful flowers and trees among the terraced fields.Seen from the hill, it looks like some natural works of art.

The weather here is mild. It is good to (for 或整句改为 It does good to our health. )our health.

People here are evey ( very )friendly. If you have a chance to visit my hometown, all of us will treat you as our family members. I am sure that you will love it ( my hometome it 指代不明).

本文小作者对家乡的美丽景色、温和的气候、友好的人们作了介绍。用词准确,语句很流畅,几乎没什么语法错误,是一篇非常不错的文章。




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