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标题: 初中英语作文My birthday评析
My birthday

Yesterday was my birthday. I invited my good friends to my home. they buyed me many nice presents.Before the party. I open all the presents one by one.They give me some surprise.They are all liked by me. Of them, I like the book best. Because it is written in English,I can pratice my English.After seeing the presents ,We have an interesting party, We danced and played some games .I feel we all enjoy ourselves and this is the best party that I hold.

1.“they buyed me many nice presents.Before the party. I open …”此句中句首字母要大写,“buyed”应改为“bought”,“open”应改为“opened”.注意时态及词形变化规则。

2.“They give me some surprise.”因叙述过去的事,应为一般过去时,故“give”应改为“gave”。

3.单词“pratice”应改为“practice” 。

4.“We have an interesting party, We danced and played some games .I feel we all enjoy ourselves and this is the best party that I hold.”应该使用一般过去时,所以“have”应改为“had”,“feel”应改为“felt”,“enjoy ”应改为“enjoyed”“is ”应改为“was”,“that I hold”定语从句时态为过去完成时较好,故”“old”应改为“had held”。

本文语句连贯,句意通顺。内容具体。但存在单词,标点和语法错误。




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